But I go crazy because of..
Are instead of Our
There instead of Their
Their instead of They're
Then instead of Than (to a lesser extend)
Effect instead of Aff... okay now I'm just nitpicking ^_^
But yeah, you need a good 'hook' to start off with. Don't overdo it though, subtle can be good too!
Less is more, or was it the other way around..? Then again it would be the same anyway.
Other than that, take your time really. You don't have to have 30+ chapters up in one day, orso.